Then, I ended up at this site: Creating a Legendary Logline
What I like is that it got me questioning what my book is about in the simplest of terms. Something about the language just clicked. Because I've written a complex book filled with twists, where much of the point is to keep the reader in the dark, summing things up is tricky. But, in the end, the book isn't about secrets or conspiracies. (Well, not mostly.) It's about a girl who is struggling with her feelings of jealousy towards her older sister, who isn't at all ready for the journey she is forced to take. So, in rewriting my query, I tried to focus more on that element and spend less time outlining the plot.
Please read and let me know what you think:
I am seeking representation for my young adult fantasy novel, Switch. It is complete at 56,000 words. The story takes place in an alternate world where technology is only beginning to complete with deep-rooted superstitions.
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Leah Elena Verdlark is a real-life fairytale princess. She is beautiful, generous, and engaged to a mythologically handsome prince. Every Parnearian citizen wants to be her, but none more than her little sister, Maria Rose. At least, that is what Maria Rose believes.
It turns out that there is one creature in the country even more desirous of Leah Elena’s good fortune. Ugly, deformed and cheated by destiny, Lia is willing to turn Parnear upside down if that is what it takes for her to step into the oldest princess’s life. The only person standing in her way is the reluctant Maria Rose, confused at finding herself the champion of an entire country and devastated at the collection of losses beginning to pile up at her feet. The more things go awry, the more Maria Rose begins to wonder if it is even possible for Parnear to be saved. If so, is she really the one to do it?
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Thank you for your consideration and time,
Thanks for reading. I hope everyone had a fabulous and rejuvenating holiday. May the new year bring you everything that you don't even dare to dream of.
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